11-18-2012 06:32 AM
11-18-2012 07:28 AM
goosd story but i agree wit harold-da-man, emmet should be included a bit more for instance maybe he and jacob could team up after a while.
11-18-2012 07:35 AM
11-18-2012 07:42 AM - edited 11-18-2012 07:43 AM
I just had another idea. Why dont you edit your story with new ideas for it that come in through this thread you know like how a video games script is almost never finish afteer the first draft you could make it better and better if you did this.